"I gotta go to the bathroom," said Billy anxiously, "There's a hole over there, perfect."
"Ahhh," He sighed with relief. He then heard to his surprise the sound of another man relieving himself.
"Nice place to leave your waste isn't it," stated the man. His name was... Henry McBilly Billy thought to himself.
Henry grunted painfully as Billy asked, "Constipated?"
"Indeed."
"That's never fun."
"It is sometimes," Said Henry strangely.
"How," Billy exclaimed, "could it be fun?"
Good start on these assignments but more detail for each would help. Seems like a strange conversation in your dialogue. I was hoping you would develop the characters realistically. Assignments need proofreading for mechanical errors. Missing one. 21/48
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